Without him, all of you would be lost souls roamin
- Feb 23, 2005
icemastertron said:To summarize your chapters in one word- WOW!
You're really good at writing Captain America. Is this the first time you're writing a fanfic? You got some great dialogue going on, and the story so far is great.
Thanks and yes, this is my first fanfic, but I'm enjoying writing this so much that I'm already planning my follow up: another ultimate mini starring everyone's favorite hairy canadian (it will hopefully be out right after UCA).
.Ultxon said:First off, there are several instances of repetition that made me a little uneasy; the main instance was in your continual use of the word door in the first chapter
How did I do that? I said door like 3 times in one paragraph. I didn't realize it when I was writing it, but next time I'll watch my word choice.